User blog comment:Raging Blast/Story Reviews/@comment-1821137-20110630141705/@comment-5151799-20110702155643

"I don't think there would be any foreign enemies of the queen in 1998... " A case of Old Style Writing.

"There are some lines Ferb wouldn't say. He talks a bit more than he originally does. " Well, when you have you have a main character in a story, you have to have him talk. :P

"Peanut butter and a blowtorch? " Phineas said it in "Rollercoaster": "We're gonna need a blowtorch and some more peanut butter." It was a reference to that.

"Uh... Ferb shouldn't be fat... " I always imagined he'd be a bit chubby when he was younger...

"The bullies would know that he is going to be a King... Joking about it... just isn't right. They'd be scared or something. " Bullies wouldn't really care if he were to be King. They pick on people, and since bullies aren't that bright, they wouldn't care who they were dealing with as long as they get to make fun.

"Uh, Lawrence wouldn't call Emily too if the Queen collapsed, he'd most likely forget that Emily is there and just call Ferb. " Old Style Writing Syndrome.

"OOC moments of Lawrence and Ferb. " Well, their personalities aren't really touched on a lot in the show. Ferb's pretty quiet, and Lawrence is usually there for comedic purposes, so.... Besides, their personalities could've changed in those five years.

"Ferb is way too young to be anointed as a king, even with his genius intelligence. " Old Style Writing Syndrome. I should change that to "Ferb being king until they can get someone to temporarily rule until he's of age to rule properly."

"Uh, Queen yelling "What the HECK?!"... seriously... " XD Another case of Old Style Writing Syndrome.

"Uh, a cliff close to the place where they anoint kings? I don't think there would be one... " Hmm. I may have overlooked that detail...

"Lawrence wouldn't say "Dunno". " Old Style Writing Syndrome.

"How does Ferb's hair say the location he'll evacuate to? " Hmm? I don't remember writing that... May have overlooked it...

"Uh... pirates... They shouldn't be existent. At least not the old-fashioned ones. " Old Style Writing Syndrome. Also, I think I wrote that after I saw Pirates of the Caribbean, and I just wanted to write something with pirates in it. ^.^

"Candace is too young to be at the mall. If Vanessa was 11, she'd be 10. And to be with her friends in the mall (assuming, since their mom was in the house) is too dangerous. " I overlooked that as well. Silly me.

""I know you can be annoyed by the boys" She'd say "boy" since she doesn't want to insult Lawrence. " Probably a typo.

"Phin would know what Solar Energy is in the first place. " Eh?

"Uh, wouldn't Britain be rescued? It's not like one guy can seize the whole Britain. " He has minions. Didn't you read about all the guys who set the castle in flames in one of the earlier chapters?

Anyway, I respect your opinions. There are some flaws in the story, I admit, but there's still lots more for me to write, so your opinion might change when it's all done. As well, I might go back and change some stuff I've already written since it's out of date... Thanks for the pros, though~!

C-? Eh, I've gotten worse ratings on some of my other stories. ;)